It is predicted that with the development of technology, people in the 21st century will have much more free time. To what extent has the prediction come true? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past, the assumption was made that in the
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less because of the advancement in science and
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we have machines to do the majority of the chores, we are still busy in our lives as we have more
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in our workplaces. In the
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has really made
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far more easier than it was before. We have various machines in our homes to do our daily household activities
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as washing machines, microwave
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etc. These inventions have reduced the average amount of time a person usually
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on daily chores. But
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these products and the convenience they
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us, we still are busy in our lives as we have to
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more in order to afford these products.
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, as
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technology
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has advanced the amount of
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in offices a person has to do has increased significantly.
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these inventions have increased
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productivity, they
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have increased
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consumption and
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the demand has
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, the average production of a prominent tea factory was 1000 bags per day in
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, but now the same factory
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10000 bags per day. In conclusion,
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development in
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may have made certain
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easy, the prediction that we will have more free time is not true as we are more busy in our lives because of the increased requirements.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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