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Social media is an essential part of young people’s lives nowadays, but its impact is often criticized. What are the advantages and disadvantages of social media in teenagers’ and young adults’ lives?

#media #part #people’s #lives #impact #teenagers’ #adults’
ALTHOUGH
 SOCIAL
MEDIA
 HAS A PARAMOUNT IMPORTANCE IN THE YOUTH'S
LIVES
,
HOWEVER
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HOWEVER,
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 IT IS JUDGED BY PEOPLE
DUE TO
 EFFECTS. IT HAS BOTH ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES IN
TEENAGERS
'
LIVES
. ONE MAJOR ADVANTAGE IS BEING
SOURCE
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A SOURCE
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 OF INFORMATION, THROUGH
THE
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SOCIAL
MEDIA
 BOTH
TEENAGERS
 AND YOUNG ADULTS STAY INFORMED,
THEY
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GET RECENT NEWS AND BROADEN
THE
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THEIR
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 HORIZONS AND OUTLOOK.
ADDITIONALLY
, THEY GET IN TOUCH BY ACCESSING SOCIAL
MEDIA
 PLATFORMS
,
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AND TAKE THE ADVANTAGE OF
SUCH
 FEATURES TEXTING, CALLING,
SHARES
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SHARING
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 INFORMATION AND THEIR DAILY
LIVES
 . APART FROM THAT, SOCIAL
MEDIA
 WOULD BE
BEST
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THE BEST
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 OPTION TO ENLARGE
CYCLE
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THE CYCLE
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 OF FRIENDS, PARTICULARLY FOR SOME
TEENAGERS
 WHO ARE ANTISOCIAL AND SUFFER FROM LONELINESS.
FOR INSTANCE
, TWITTER AND THREADS ARE
HIGHLY-RECOMMENDED
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HIGHLY RECOMMENDED
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PLATFROMS
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PLATFORMS
 FOR MAKING FRIENDS. A
FURTHER
 DRAWBACK IS BEING
WASTE
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A WASTE
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 OF TIME, BOTH
TEENAGERS
 AND YOUNG ADULTS SPEND MOST OF THEIR DAILY TIME ON SOCIAL
MEDIA
, JUST SCROLLING THE VIDEOS OR PHOTOS
INSTEAD
 OF DOING PHYSICAL ACTIVITY OR DOING ASSIGNMENTS. IT LEADS TO ADDICTION AND
YIELD
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YIELDS
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 NEGATIVE RESULTS, NAMELY DEPRESSION,
SEDENTARY
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A SEDENTARY
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 LIFESTYLE,
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AND
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INSOMNIA. ALL THESE NEGATIVE IMPLICATIONS AFFECT PRODUCTIVITY.
TO CONCLUDE
, DESPITE
SIGNIFICANT
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THE SIGNIFICANT
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 BENEFITS OF SOCIAL
MEDIA
 ON
TEENAGERS
'
LIVES
, IT HAS ADVERSE EFFECTS.
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task achievement
When discussing multiple aspects of a topic, ensure each point is developed sufficiently. For example, consider using specific data or studies to support the impact of social media addiction on teenagers, or provide more examples of how social media can broaden horizons and outlook.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using transition words and phrases can help maintain the flow of the essay and guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Strong opening and closing paragraphs that set the stage and summarize your arguments well.
task achievement
Addresses both advantages and disadvantages of social media, showcasing a balanced perspective on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer connectivity
  • networking opportunities
  • educational content
  • self-expression
  • cyberbullying
  • addiction
  • mental health issues
  • privacy concerns
  • identity theft
  • sleep patterns
  • digital space
  • social networking platforms
  • information access
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • showcase talents
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