The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the Monarch butterfly.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram gives information about the
stages
that a Monarch butterfly follows during its life.
Overall
, the life cycle is made
by
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four bigger
stages
,
then
each
stage
is divided into other phases. The first
stage
is the egg
stage
and the
last
is the adult one. Between
them
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there are the larval and the pupal
stages
.
First,
eggs are laid down on milkweed and after 14 days they hatch and caterpillars come out.
Then
, between the larval and the pupal
stages
, the larva attaches to a branch and after a 10
days
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period turns into a chrysalis. The pupal
stage
starts with the emergence of the adult from the chrysalis
,
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and continues with the migration to the south of the
new born
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butterfly . After a 6 months
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the butterfly faces a migration to the north that ends with the mating
stage
and the subsequent laying of eggs.
Then
the cycle starts again.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stages, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • Monarch butterfly
  • eggs
  • milkweed plants
  • larvae
  • caterpillars
  • feed
  • chrysalis
  • pupa
  • metamorphosis
  • emerge
  • adult butterfly
  • repeat
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