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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates
two
 possible
location
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locations
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 for building a new supermart in Garlsdon
town
.
Overall
, there are
two
 locations for planning a new supermarket in Garlson
town
 which has been through the
centre
 of
ctiy
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city
 by railway and has three main roads, starting from cenfre to
countryside
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the countryside
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.
Moreover
,
two
 industry
zone
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zones
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is
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are
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 on either the north
and
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or
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 south of
this
 city. The site is the first option to establish
new
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a new
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 supermarket in
countryside
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the countryside
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 where
locates
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located
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the
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in the
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north-west
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northwest
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 of Garlsdon.
This
 place can go by using
two
 main transportations both railway and main road. The main route which
has
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is
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 twelve
kilometers
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kilometres
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 to Hindon
having
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has
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 10,000 population.
Additionally
, another choice which is
design
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designed
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 to
set
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be set
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 up in
Town
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the Town
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Centre
 is
the
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a
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 place that has no traffic.
Town
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The Town
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Centre
 is near the south's industry zone. There are
varouis
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various
 transportation facilities both roads and
railway
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railways
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. The new supermarket
locate
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is located
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 in the
south-east
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southeast
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 of
Town
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the Town
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Centre
where
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which
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 is not far
form
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from
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road
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the road
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 to Cransdon and
distance
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the distance
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 is approximately 25 km.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, town, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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