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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts how many
tourists
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traveled
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 to five various tourism destinations around the globe in a fifteen-year period from 1990 to 2005.
To begin
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 with, North America hosted the highest number of visitors
in
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all over the period; Starting at 70
million
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tourists
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, it
experinced
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experienced
 a moderate increase of 20
million
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 for a decade, and
leveled
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 off at 90
million
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. With a rapid rise for the first five years, Central and Eastern Europe, the second most absorbing site, doubled from 30
million
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 visitors to 60
million
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;
thereafter
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 growing
with
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 a slower pace, it reached
to
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the same
numbers
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number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 as North America, 90
million
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.
However
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,
two
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the two
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region
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regions
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 with the least number of
tourists
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, Sub-Sahara Africa
along with
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south
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South
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 America, commencing with
the
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 equal number of
tourists
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,
they
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apply
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had nearly
same
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 trend until 1995 when their trends started to be divergent. In Absorbing
tourists
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, Sub-Saharan Africa was marginally
successful
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more successful
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 than
South-America
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South America
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at the end
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; with approximately five
million
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 more
tourists
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, Sub-Saharan Africa ended up at over 21
million
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.
While
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 for south-Asia, the trend climbed
in
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at
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 a slower pace in the beginning, it reached
at
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almost 40
million
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tourist
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tourists
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 by 2000;
afterward
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afterwards
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,
with
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at
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 a higher speed, it touched
to
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50
million
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 in the
last
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 year.
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