You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart above depicts
expenditure
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the expenditure
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per month in
dollars
of a particular family in the USA on three different needs,
such
as food, gas, and clothing in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that all of the items
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
has fluctuated
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and it was
respresented
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represented
by one line in green colour.
First,
in January, the family was spending as much as 500 US
Dollars
on food.
Then
, in the next month, the spending increased to 580
dollars
. After that, they pressed the budget to 420
dollars
and continuously until April to below 400
dollars
.
Besides
that, in January and March, the family was expended around 380
dollars
on gas.
Otherwise
, in February, they spend only 320
dollars
.
However
, the expenditure on gas
was
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sharply climbed to 580
dollars
, in April. On the
last
item, at
first,
the family budget for clothes
just
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was just
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about 220
dollars
.
Nonetheless
, the number was dramatically soared to 590
dollars
.
Nevertheless
, the budget decreased in March. Later, in April, they bought clothes and
spend
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spent
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more than 600
dollars
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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