IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In some countries good school and medical facilities are available in city only. Some people think that teachers and good hospital, education should be provided in rural areas for few years. While some people think that every person is free to do work according to their choice. Discuss your ideas and opinion. Discuss both the sides.

2.5 / 9
Band scoreView breakdown ↓
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
Now a day
Correct your spelling
Nowadays
show examples
education
Use synonyms
 and medical
facility
Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
show examples
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 the
most
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
prime
requirement
Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
show examples
 of
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
every person which are live
Use synonyms
city
Correct article usage
a city
show examples
 or rural.In many countries government
also
Linking Words
 support
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
free
education
Use synonyms
 and free health
check up
Add a hyphen
check-up
show examples
 in both of the areas.
Body paragraph 1
As per new
yuonger
Correct your spelling
younger
 generation
trends
Add a comma
trends,
show examples
people
Use synonyms
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
like
work
Use synonyms
 to only in
city
Use synonyms
 areas for the
education
Use synonyms
 and
medicle
Correct your spelling
medical
 stream
due to
Linking Words
earn
Wrong verb form
earning
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
more money and good transportation
facilties
Correct your spelling
facilities
 rather than rural areas.
Body paragraph 2
Morever
Correct your spelling
Moreover
,
my
Change preposition
in my
show examples
 opinion
people
Use synonyms
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
 free to do
work
Use synonyms
according to
Linking Words
there
Correct your spelling
their
show examples
 choice in
Correct article usage
the ruraal
show examples
ruraal
Correct your spelling
rural
 area aslo because
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
some
people
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
 there
there
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
freely without any
hurdle
Fix the agreement mistake
hurdles
show examples
 in
regads
Correct your spelling
regard to
 transportation
facily
Correct your spelling
facilities
 for up and down there.
Conclusion
when we discussing regarding the facility
about
Change preposition
for
show examples
education
Use synonyms
 and medical in outside of the
city
Use synonyms
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 very poor rather
than
Change preposition
to
show examples
Use synonyms
city
Correct article usage
the city
show examples
 centre because
maany
Correct your spelling
many
people
Use synonyms
aare
Correct your spelling
are
 not
interesting
Replace the word
interested
show examples
to do
Change preposition
in doing
show examples
work
Use synonyms
 there because more
time consuming
Add a hyphen
time-consuming
show examples
 there
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
to and fro and sufficient
accomodation
Correct your spelling
accommodation
 facility
also
Linking Words
 not
avalable
Correct your spelling
available
 suit to there.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction & Conclusion
Your essay introduces the topic and presents two viewpoints but lacks a clear thesis statement that establishes your position clearly.
Logical Structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows logically from one idea to the next. Consider using linking words or phrases to enhance coherence.
Supported Main Points
Expand on your ideas with more specific examples or explanations to make your arguments more convincing.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Work on clarifying your ideas. Rephrasing some sentences might make your arguments clearer.
Complete Response
You address the topic by discussing both perspectives.
Task Response
Your essay reflects an attempt to cover the nuances of the debate, considering both sides' perspectives.
Task Response
You demonstrated awareness of the issues and needs related to education and medical facilities in rural versus urban areas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • governmental funding
  • concentration of resources
  • specialists
  • inequality gap
  • sustainable development
  • urban migration
  • overpopulation
  • mandatory service
  • societal development
  • quality of life
  • demotivation
  • dissatisfaction
  • flexibility
  • autonomy
  • career placements
  • innovation
  • excellence
  • drain of skilled professionals
  • incentives
  • balanced approach
What to do next:
Look at other essays: