The amount of time spend on sports and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest ?

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More time should be added to school so as to deal with the

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of obesity in

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. In my opinion, I think

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is not the best way of solving

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essay will indicate other solutions. On the one hand, adding more time for young school attendees is not wise. They may do many exercises and go back to their bad eating habits.

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will not help at all because they will regain the calories they would have lost in their exercises.

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, my aunt did the same thing, she exercised a lot and lost my calories, and after a few days, she attended a party and ate cakes and many fatty foods and regained.

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, all her work out exercising was worthless, because she had to work out again.

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, education is paramount for parents to be taught about healthy eating,

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they will in turn educate their

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on the same.

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, teachings on eating a balanced diet are to be introduced in families.

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, an emphasis on cutting down on fatty and starchy foods which add to obesity should be given in these teachings. Actually, the best thing is for the whole family to go and see a dietician who will give them knowledge of which foods to eat and not to eat and

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teach them about their eating habits.

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, it is vital to be educated about a

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, so as to know how to tackle it. In conclusion, adding more hours to

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trying to deal with

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who are overweight is not a good view in my opinion. Education is the key to

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as it will give insight to the parents and the obese

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on how to fight

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over-weight

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Organize your ideas clearly. Group similar ideas together in coherent paragraphs.

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Make use of any relevant examples to support your main points.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure your conclusion reinforces the main points discussed and summarises your stance.

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The essay makes a clear argument against the idea that increasing sports time in schools solves childhood obesity and suggests education as a better alternative.

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Good use of personal anecdote to illustrate the limitation of exercise alone in weight management.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which are key elements of coherent writing.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

300 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

tackle the problem
overweight children
increase physical activity
healthier lifestyle
calorie intake
weight management
overall well-being
active and health-conscious generation
nutritional education
school curriculums
healthy food choices
promote a healthy lifestyle
implementing policies
unhealthy food options
reinforce healthy eating habits

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The amount of time spend on sports and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest ?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?