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Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Introduction
Every
peoples
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people
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has
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the right choice to
doing
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 a
marriage
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 either or before the 30th.
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 some financial
stability
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stability,
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people
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 choose to marry after the 30th. Many
people
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 are worried about their permanent jobs and have their own house to settle in the popular city.
Body paragraph 1
In the recent scenario,
people
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 are given more priority to have a good stable job and some of their own properties in mega
city
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cities
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.
Due to
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 these particular reasons,
people
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 are their
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marriage marriage
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married
 after the 30th
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In many conditions
people
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 are
doing
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getting
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 married before
30th
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the 30th
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due to
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 some family-related issues like their home
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 no one to make food and take care of their own home and parents, in
that
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 cases,
peoples
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people
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 are accepted for
marriage
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an
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at an
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 early age without future planning.
Body paragraph 3
Based on family responsibilities
people
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 have to decide their
marriage
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 at any
ages
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age
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.
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in my opinion ,
peoples
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people
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 have their own choice to marry at any age but have to think about their family's responsibilities and financial condition to have sufficient to afford
in
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apply
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any bad condition in future to survive.
Conclusion
In conclusion,in some rural
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people
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are their
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get married
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marriage
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 early due their stuck to local rules and regulations which are against local families.

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introduction conclusion
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logical structure
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supported main points
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task achievement
The essay acknowledges both advantages and disadvantages of marrying later, which aligns well with the task prompt.
task achievement
You express personal opinion and provide a conclusion, which adds depth to your response.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional maturity
  • Self-awareness
  • Career development
  • Societal pressure
  • Fertility decline
  • Caregiving demands
  • Biological children
  • Familial responsibilities
  • Transitioning into married life
  • Loneliness
  • Societal judgment
  • Traditional timelines
  • Resilient relationships
  • Secure foundation
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