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Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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the right choice to
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 either or before the 30th.
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 some financial
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 choose to marry after the 30th. Many
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 are worried about their permanent jobs and have their own house to settle in the popular city. In the recent scenario,
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 are given more priority to have a good stable job and some of their own properties in mega
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 these particular reasons,
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marriage marriage
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married
 after the 30th In many conditions
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 married before
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 some family-related issues like their home
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 no one to make food and take care of their own home and parents, in
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 cases,
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 are accepted for
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 early age without future planning. Based on family responsibilities
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 have to decide their
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 at any
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. in my opinion ,
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 have their own choice to marry at any age but have to think about their family's responsibilities and financial condition to have sufficient to afford
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any bad condition in future to survive. In conclusion,in some rural
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 early due their stuck to local rules and regulations which are against local families.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional maturity
  • Self-awareness
  • Career development
  • Societal pressure
  • Fertility decline
  • Caregiving demands
  • Biological children
  • Familial responsibilities
  • Transitioning into married life
  • Loneliness
  • Societal judgment
  • Traditional timelines
  • Resilient relationships
  • Secure foundation
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