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Living in a country where you have to speak a foregin language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Living in a different country makes you have to speak another
language
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. That will cause you serious social
problems
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 and practical
problems
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. And I will tell you if I agree or disagree. And I will give you reasons and examples from my knowledge or experience.
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, living in another country is so hard because you have to learn a new
language
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. And there are a
lot
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social
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 and practical
problems
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,
such
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 as communication with people and finding new work.
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, it will be so hard for the kids to
know
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 new friends.
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, I agree with the statement because you will learn a
lot
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 of things like learning a new
language
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 and you will stand in front of
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problems
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, and you will learn a
lot
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 of things from these. And I will give you examples from my knowledge,
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 as when I go to Japan I use
google
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Google
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 translate because it is very hard to
communication
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communicate
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 with them.
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 but not least, I think that if you live in another country, it is very useful for a
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 of people, because you will solve a
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 of
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 on your own and you will learn a new
language
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Expand on your points with more specific examples. For instance, while you've mentioned using Google Translate in Japan, diving deeper into how that impacted your ability to connect socially or solve practical problems would strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure there is a clear introduction outlining your stance, followed by body paragraphs that delve into specific supporting points or counterarguments, and a concise conclusion summarizing your main ideas.
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Develop your main ideas more. Instead of stating broad effects such as difficulty in communication, you might discuss specific situations or consequences and how they personally impacted your experience.
coherence and cohesion
You've structured your essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion. This helps with the flow and readability of your arguments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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