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Nowadays as a part of education process students work at our company for short period of time without pay do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#part #education #process #students #work #company #period #time #outweigh
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 of study a lot of students are required to do a work placement in which they have to work without getting paid.
This
 process involves a lot of experiments
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confidence to work in
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 future. I think
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 that the merits of
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 phenomenon
outweight
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outweigh
 the demerits.
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task achievement
Develop your ideas further by providing detailed examples and explanations. This will enhance the depth and quality of your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your argument easily.
coherence cohesion
Try to improve sentence variety and complexity for language sophistication. Consider revising for grammatical accuracy and varied sentence structures.
task achievement
You've identified the topic and your opinion early in your response, which helps set the context for the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay introduces the topic effectively, providing a viewpoint that is relevant to the task.
coherence cohesion
Expresses a balanced view on the topic, giving a sense of consideration of both merits and demerits.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internship
  • Unpaid work
  • Vocational training
  • Skill acquisition
  • Professional network
  • Workplace dynamics
  • Exploitation
  • Labor laws
  • Career development
  • Corporate responsibility
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