In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
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coming
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the future,
citizens
just will seat
in quite automatic cars and Verb problem
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they going
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go
trip
. Fix the agreement mistake
trips
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all Add a comma
Actually,
kind
of road vehicles will be Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
auto driving
. I do believe that Add a hyphen
auto-driving
pros
far outweigh the cons.
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the pros
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change
citizens
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apply
be
lead to Unnecessary verb
apply
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a decreased
decreased
in road accidents. Many accidents occur when drivers are tired and their Replace the word
decrease
brain
can not Fix the agreement mistake
brains
take
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make
a
right decision Correct article usage
the
that
moment or sometimes fall asleep behind the steering wheel. Whenever Change preposition
at that
auto driving
cars will be Add a hyphen
auto-driving
access
to the public, they can drive Replace the word
accessible
to
anywhere without any concern.Change preposition
apply
for
instance, we should drive long Capitalize word
For
distance
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distances
by
our car whenever we fall asleep rather than staying Change preposition
in
inside
the road Change preposition
on
we
can carry on without any problem.
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so we
In addition
, citizens
can enjoy driving on the path and their moments with
watching the beautiful scenery or watching movies even Change preposition
apply
they
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while they
can
doing their tasks. It might be really amazing Verb problem
are
happen
, imagine you can do many enjoyable tasks Fix the infinitive
to happen
instead
of driving whole the way.
Exactly, advancement
of technology is not always without any problems. It should Correct article usage
the advancement
consider
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be considered
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that this
this vehicles
might Change the determiner
this vehicle
these vehicles
be
have Unnecessary verb
apply
been
errors that Verb problem
made
make
trouble for humans. like errors in their steering wheel so drivers could not do any arraignment. Verb problem
caused
Furthermore
, many drivers will miss their job
and they Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
do
not Verb problem
will
able
to find Add a missing verb
be able
another jobs
. It might Replace the adjective
another job
other jobs
be produce
social and personal problems. They will Change the verb form
produce
confuse
in their life. But if Wrong verb form
be confused
government
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the government
will
built a deep and strong infrastructure for it , Verb problem
apply
citizens
damage less than after.
In conclusion, it can be a milestone for a new life that leads to convenient
and peaceful life.Add an article
a convenient
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