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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people argue that the governments of me the richest countries contribute

Some people argue that the governments of
me
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the richest
countries
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 contribute to
help
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helping
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 the poor
countries
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 with
a financial ways
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a financial way
financial ways
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. Personally I partly
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this
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these
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countries
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 should help
with
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in
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 a large of ways
to
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the undeveloped societies. On the one
hand
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, the developed
countries
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 consider the citizens who are living in
a
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poorer
countries
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. So the
ricly
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rich
 authorities lend a lizard
with
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in
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financial
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a financial
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 way.
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, these days many wars
has
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 been around the world
especially
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, especially
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 in Ukraina and
Rossia
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Russia
, and so many
countries
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 help these
countries
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with
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in
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 financial
way
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ways
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especially
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, especially
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 Ukraina.
Morever
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Moreover
, these
helps are
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help is
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 really crucial for local residents. On the
othe
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other
hand
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, the developed governments help
with
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in
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 a lot of ways to the not able to developing
countries
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. Nowadays, there are many floods or
earthuakis
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earthquakes
earthquake
has
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that have
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 been going on around
world
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.
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, so many
goverenments
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governments
government
 lend a
hand
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a
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to a
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Turkey country, with financial , support
with
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for
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 their emotions particularly the
goverenments
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governments
 of
countries
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sent
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a
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firemen stuff and medical stuff in
irder
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order
 to improve the condition. On top of that, the developed
countries
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 give a
hand
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 with
other type
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another type
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 of conditions
such
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 as
supports
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support
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 on televisions and shows related to the country's help with financial way
on the other
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hand
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of
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apply
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supports
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support
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 equally to the poor
countries
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.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your thoughts clearly. Start with a clear introduction that presents your position and outline the points you will discuss. Conclude with a summary and reiteration of your main argument.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more thoroughly. Provide clear arguments and support them with specific examples. Ensure your points are relevant and directly related to the question.
language
Improve your language accuracy by carefully proofreading your work for spelling and grammar errors.
task achievement
You have addressed the topic and attempted to present arguments for and against financial aid to poorer countries.
task achievement
The essay uses some relevant examples, such as the mention of the Ukraine and Turkey situations, which helps in explaining the points raised.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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