Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree?

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The essay presents a clear position that disagrees with the idea of more police as the only solution to crime rates.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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250 words

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