It is suggested that some rich countries give money to poorer countries rather than financial aid.
Nowadays many poorer
countries
are being provided financially by developed Use synonyms
countries
in order to eliminate poverty. There Use synonyms
isn't
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aren't
however
effects and it is suggested that other types of help should be given to solve Linking Words
this
issue. I Linking Words
am totally
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totally agree
agree
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agree on
agree to
agree with
this
view because of some Linking Words
significat
reasons.
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significant
To begin
with, many rich nations invest large Linking Words
amount
of Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
money
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to
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in
ubdeveloped
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developed
countries
. So those can provide their populations with social facilities that people Use synonyms
straggling
with. Verb problem
struggle
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, in most Linking Words
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countries
children have Add a comma
countries,
not
opportunity to study in schools Correct your spelling
no
as a result
of Linking Words
lack
of schools. Correct article usage
the lack
Therefore
country can build new schools Linking Words
have
sufficient facilities with Correct word choice
and have
aid
of received cash. Correct article usage
the aid
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Moreover
nations that have experienced wars Add a comma
Moreover,
have
not enough hospitals as they are destroyed. Hospitals play Add a missing verb
do have
crucial
role in Add an article
a crucial
health
of the general public and Add an article
the health
lack
of them, medicine and necessary treatment for patients leads to Correct article usage
the lack
increase
in Correct article usage
an increase
tge
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apply
death
. Fix the agreement mistake
deaths
Money
given by rich Use synonyms
countries
can be Use synonyms
solution
to the quality of Add an article
the solution
a solution
public's
life and well-being.
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the public's
Although
there are numerous advantages Linking Words
from
help financially, I am of the opinion that other methods of aid should be carried out. Change preposition
to
Countries
that underwent various fights like Phalasfine need more valuable things compared to Use synonyms
money
. Use synonyms
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, as Linking Words
climate
is changing, Add an article
the climate
population
particularly, children suffer from cold weather. nowadays, Gifts Correct article usage
the population
such
as clothes, Linking Words
foods
and some toys for Fix the agreement mistake
food
youngs
can be indeed Correct your spelling
young
in
these days, prevent them Change preposition
apply
threating
of illness and death. Because there are no stores, Correct your spelling
threatening
markets
to buy personal needs. Correct word choice
or markets
Furthermore
, Linking Words
this
can be useful to inspire young people to give help hand, learning kindness and Linking Words
genuis
. Especially children can Correct your spelling
genius
genuine
aduquate
many things that important can walk Correct your spelling
adequate
of
their life.
In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
while
many individuals Linking Words
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
money
is the way to help Use synonyms
to
poorer Change preposition
apply
countries
, I think other types of aid Use synonyms
is
more beneficial in both Correct subject-verb agreement
are
personality
of humans and Correct article usage
the personality
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the lif
lif
of Correct your spelling
life
public
in those nations.Add an article
the public
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