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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates the
number
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 of households in the USA in three given years, which are 2007, 2011, and 2015. They are categorised by their annual income and divided into five groups, namely families with an annual income less than $25,000 (
group
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 A), $25,000-$49,999 (
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B
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), $50,000-$74,999 (
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C
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), $75,000-$99,999 (
group
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 D), and above $100,000 (
group
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E
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)
Overall
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,
while
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Group
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Groups
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 A and
B
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 saw an increase,
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E
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 decreased its
number
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, but the opposite happened when
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group
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E
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 increased.
However
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,
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Group
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C
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 and D remained steady throughout the given
period
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.
Group
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 A started the
period
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 at 25
million
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while
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group
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B
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 stood at around 27
million
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 in 2007.
Similarly
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, in 2011, their numbers rose to 29 and 30
million
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, respectively.
However
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, they both dropped in 2015, as
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group
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Group
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 A dipped to 27
million
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 and
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group
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B
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 to 28
million
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.
Contrastly
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, the
number
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 for
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E
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 saw the opposite trend.
Group
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E
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 began at just under 30
million
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 before dropping to around 27
million
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 in 2011.
Nonetheless
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, the
number
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 grew to around 33
million
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 in 2015.
Although
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 other groups fluctuated,
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group
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groups
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C
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 and D experienced a relatively steady
period
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. Throughout the given
period
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,
group
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C
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 stayed at around 21
million
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while
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group
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 D remained at around 15
million
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, group, b, c, e, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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