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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The presented bar chart depicts the average amount of
hours
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 tourists from China, USA, Turkey and Brazil spent on various activities during a vacation trip in Greece in August of 2019.
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, it is apparent that visitors had their own distinct cultural habits and behavioural patterns.
Firstly
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, in comparison with other nations, Chinese tourists spent the most time reading books (approximately 8
hours
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 a day),
while
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 simultaneously spending the least amount of
hours
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 visiting places, with less than 60 minutes per day. At the same time, there is no surprise that Brazilian tourists went to the beach the most when compared with other nations, allocating 6
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 to
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 activity.
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, travellers from Brazil spent only 120 minutes sightseeing, making them second least after Chinese travellers.
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, visitors from the USA and Turkey were more well-rounded and distributed their spare time proportionally.
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, both American and Turkish travellers spend 3
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 a day sightseeing, which is the highest number among all visitors.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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