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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016
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The line graph above depicts the stock
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price
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prices
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 of four different technology firms from the years 2011 until 2016.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Apple was fluctuated
while
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 Google was
stagnanted
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stagnant
stagnated
.
Besides
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 that, Facebook was gradually increased and Yahoo was continuously decreased. First things
first,
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in 2011, Apple started with 5000
dollars
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. After that, the
price
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 was sharply soared to 35
dollars
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.
Then
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, dramatically dropped to below 10000
dollars
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.
This
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 trend happened until 2016. Even, in 2016, the
stocked
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 was very low
to
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at
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 5100
dollars
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.
Besides
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, surprisingly, the stock
price
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 of Google was about 0.
In other words
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, there was
not
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no
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 fluctuation. On the other side, Facebook and Yahoo began at the same
price
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, which was 8000
dollars
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.
Nevertheless
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, Facebook
was
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slowly reached
the
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its
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 peak. From 5000 to 20000
dollars
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 in five years. So, it was growth more than 100 per cent. Meanwhile, Yahoo
was
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steadily dipped until hit the bottom
to
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of
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 2000
dollars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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