The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon
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The diagram illustrates the development of salmon from eggs during their life cycle.
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there are three distinct stages illustrated in the process. commencing with producing eggs in the water and ending with the development of a mature salmon. The first stage is when the eggs, in the upper river (slow moving), are put under the small stones and reeds, which take approximately 5 to 6 months. The next step after that, they become fry (3–8) cm; at
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point, they have a blue
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, a small body, fins, and a tail, which can support them to travel a long way. Over time, they live at a lower river (fast flowing)
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they consume food that supports them to grow approximately for 4 years.
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, they become bigger from the
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time between 12 and 15 cm, and
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smolt
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the smolt
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changes to dark blue, and the tail is
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longer. The final stage of the cycle is adult salmon that can be eligible to start different lives, which they can search
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their own food for nearly 5 years. Having completed all these steps, the lifecycle will
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begin again.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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