The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the floor
plan
of a public library and the changes which have taken place between 20 years ago and today. In general, it can be seen that all of the rooms have been replaced with rooms for other purposes and some minor changes in books places. Looking at the
datails
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data
, as regards the
south west
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southwest
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of the
plan
, there was a reading
room
there 20 years ago which has
replaced
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been replaced
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by a computer
room
.
Next,
in the
south east
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southeast
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of the
plan
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plan,
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there was an enquiry desk which has been removed and a new cafe has been built in that location.
Following
this
, in the
north east
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northeast
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of the
plan
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plan,
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there was a
room
for children's books which has been replaced by
lecture
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a lecture
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room
. Another change that has taken place is
on
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in
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the
north west
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northwest
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of the library which in the past there was a
room
for CDs, videos and computer games and has been replaced by a
room
for storytelling events.
Furthermore
, there were tables and chairs in the middle of the library which
has
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have
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been removed.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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