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The bar chart illustrates the number of passengers entering Mexico on international flights from 2005 to 2010, broken down by their origins: Canada, the USA, Europe, and South America.

The bar chart illustrates the number of passengers entering Mexico on international flights from 2005 to 2010, broken down by their origins: Canada, the USA, Europe, and South America.
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The diagram represents data about people joining Mexico on international air
flight
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 over a
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 of 5 years,
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2005 to 2010 . Including Canada , USA,
Europe
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, and South
America
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. In general, The country with the highest number of passengers entering Mexico over a given
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 was
Europe
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 .
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, the lowest country in
traveling
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 to Mexico was S.
America
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 throughout the timeframe . In detail, from 2005 to 2010,
USA
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the USA
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 , South
America
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, and
Europe
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 had fluctuations over a prolonged
period
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 .
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, Canada was an exception as it grew steadily from 2005 to 2010.
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, in 2005 Canada recorded nearly 800.0000
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passengers which was half as much as
Europe
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 in
this
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period
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2006 ,
S.
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South America
America
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 projected 200,000
of
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visitors which was a huge difference in the bar chart compared to
USA
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the USA
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 which recorded 6,500.000 roughly in 2006.
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