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The diagram below gives some information about the process of producing instant

nodles

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noodles

nodules

in the factory

that it

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which

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consists of various steps.we can see that it possesses 8 steps of instant

nodls

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noodles

nodes

,from flour to selling to customers.

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At the

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The

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first stage

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production nodles , it is

begined

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begins

with collecting flour in the storage soils

and

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apply

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followed of

that is

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mixed water and oil

that is

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converted to dough sheets through rollers.

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Moreover

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the combination is entered

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into

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dough strips that

generated

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generate

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many

nodles

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nodules

noodles

discs

can

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that can

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be cooked with oil with

drying

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dried

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According to

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this

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approach ,they

are

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added many

vegtables

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vegetables

vegetable

species to the

nodle

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noodle

nodule

cups and the

last

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steps

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step

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is that

appearing

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appear

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many

nodle

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noodle

nodule

cup

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cups

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with

subjoing

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subjoin

subjoining

some

labbles

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babbles

bubbles

and seals for transforming to the

diffrent

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different

markets.

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the diagram below shows how instant nodles are manufactured.

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that our happiness depends on how much money we have. Others say that money cannot buy happiness. Do you think that having money is the key to happiness, or are there more important factors?

Nowdays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

Task 2: In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?