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Newspapers will remain the main source of news in the future and the Internet will not have any effect. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#newspapers #source #news #future #internet #effect
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Some people think that
internet
 networks will not replace
newspapers
 in the future, and will not become a main source of news. I strongly disagree with
this
 point, and suppose that oppositely, the
internet
 will fully replace
newspapers
.First of all, the
internet
 has already become
one
 of the most convenient and accessible ways to be aware of news happening around the world. Day to day humanity is trying to find more ways to make life and data sharing easier and faster, and unfortunately, in that case,
newspapers
 will be replaced by other publics in the nearest future. As evidence, at present,
newspapers
 and magazines are being published much later than their competitors and even every
one
 of them has its online version, which each person has free access to.
In addition
, as the demand decreases, the cost of
newspapers
 gradually rises, which can not be an advantage for publishers. In comparison, if the price for
one
 journal ten years ago was equal to
one
 dollar, nowadays it can be higher than 10 dollars.
Moreover
, journals have pretty limited opportunities, and can not provide numerous opinions and points, which the
internet
 can,
due to
 social media and websites, where feedback option is provided. All things considered,
newspapers
 would not stay for a long time, a fortiori, remain the main source of news,
due to
 the fact, that it can not be compared to network at least in the amount of information provided, and commodity in using.
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