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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The chart gives information about the indication of the senior citizens during 60 years in
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,
Sweden
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 and Japan. Looking at on
overall
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 structure, it is readily apparent that, elderly populations had increased in all three countries during
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 period. Regarding
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Japan, the proportion of seniors amounted
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% and
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 slowly went down over decades with
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 slightly again after
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1990. After 2030 the indication of population aged 65 and over climbed significantly. In terms of
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 and
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, The
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 and
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 lines follow a similar steady upward trend, with the
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 reaching around 20% and
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 close to 25% by 2040.

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