These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children’s behavior. Do you agree or disagree?
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Try to articulate your stance on whether you agree or disagree with the statement about violence on television and its impact on children's behavior more clearly. This will make your essay focused and coherent.
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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