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Many people think that museums and galleries should only show work from local artists rather than work from other countries. Do you agree?

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Some
people
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 believe that only local
artists
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'
work
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 should be showcased in museums and galleries as compared to international
work
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. I partially agree with
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 statement. Displaying foreign artwork could foster global cultural
diversity
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 and creativity in local artisans. First and foremost, having artwork from global regions could enhance cultural
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 in the museum.
People
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 would get to know about different art forms and paintings from various regions and how they have grown historically in different places in the world.
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, museums in Japan have paintings from Africa, pottery from India, and historic car designs from Europe. By visiting
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 a place,
people
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 would gain knowledge about how
people
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 in older times thought and grew
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regions
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,
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 enhancing knowledge about cultural
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.
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, artwork from other countries could result in a significant increase in creativity among the locals. Viewing different art-related works from various nations could cause
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 to think in different directions,
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 resulting in ideation.
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, after viewing the Mona Lisa portrait, many painters started drawing the human face, which has created many new
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,
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 increasing fame and employment for
people
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. So, seeing
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 from
artists
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 from different countries provides inspiration to create something new,
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 increasing the thinking capability of
people
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 and making them more creative.
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, though some
people
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 believe that only the
work
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 from local
artists
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 should be shown in museums and galleries, as compared to
work
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 from other countries, I believe that foreign
work
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 should be encouraged as it fosters global cultural
diversity
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 and enhances creativity in local
artists
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.

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Task Achievement
Ensure to maintain a balanced view while presenting your argument, and explore both sides equally if you partially agree.
Coherence and Cohesion
Provide a smoother transition between ideas; this enhances flow and makes your essay easier to read.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, maintaining a coherent structure throughout.
Task Achievement
Specific examples, such as the Mona Lisa's impact and the variety of global art in Japan, effectively illustrate main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph centers around a specific idea, contributing to a logical structure, and making the reader follow your arguments easily.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Heritage
  • Regional Culture
  • Economic Benefits
  • Local Talent
  • Authentic Local Art
  • Diverse Perspectives
  • Mutual Understanding
  • Balanced Approach
  • Cultural Exchange
  • Artistic Styles
  • Innovations
  • Global Reputation
  • Exhibitions
  • Preservation
  • Promotion
  • Unique Aspects
  • Educational Experience
  • Mutual Understanding
  • Tolerance
  • Stimulating the Economy
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