The picture illustrates Biofuel Production / Ethanol. Summarize the information and make comparsion when necessary.

The picture illustrates the process of how Ethanol is produced to provide biofuel, which everyone can use as fuel for cars, trucks, or even planes. There are several key important stages in the process of it which will be set out in the following essay.
Firstly
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, the vehicles would
be produced
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produce
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carbon dioxide and spread
in
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it in
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the air. Plants and trees
likely
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are likely
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to catch the carbon dioxide because it
helped
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helps
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them to grow. After that, plants and trees
ready
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are ready
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to
hervested
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harvest
harvested
and need to be cut for some good reason by
human
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humans
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. They produced cellulose and after passing some process, they would be produced some sugars.
Finally
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, when microbes
added
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are added
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, it could
produced
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produce
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ethanol that
ready
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is ready
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to use as fuel. In conclusion, carbon dioxide would be produced by daily life activities and it could be useful for plants and trees to grow because they helped to
made
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make
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ethanol for produced biofuel.

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task achievement
Include more specific examples or details about the process to enhance clarity and demonstrate understanding.
task achievement
Ensure all the necessary stages of the ethanol production process are covered to achieve a complete response.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow by clearly connecting the main stages of the process.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction provides a brief overview of the topic and sets the stage for the detailed description.
task achievement
The essay captures the general stages of the ethanol production process, suggesting awareness of the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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