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Some people think that child care centres provide the best services for children of pre school age.other working parents think that family members such as grand parents will be better careers for their kids.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Good parenting is very significant for
children
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's growth, some people think that
daycare
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 gives the best services for
children
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's needs. Meanwhile, I firmly agree that
ivolving
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involving
evolving
 family members like
grand
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grandparents
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parents
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 will engage
to
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in
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 a better future for kids.
This
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 essay will examine some key points for both views.
To begin
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initially
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initially,
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 every child needs full
attentions
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attention
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 from their
parents
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especially
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, especially
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 at
their
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a
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 young age.
For some
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Some
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 working
parents
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, they believe that a
child
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childcare
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care
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center
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centre
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provide
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provides
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 the best services for their
children
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, considering that
daycare
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 has
their
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its
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 own regulations,
establish
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establishes
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the
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apply
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good
envirountments
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environments
environment
, and
hiring
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hires
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 some
profesionals
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professionals
 to take
care
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 of their
children
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.
Additionally
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, the
care
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 centres have official
licence
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licences
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 and
reqistered
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are required
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in
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by
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the ministry
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ministry
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Ministry
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 of
education
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Education
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 under
Government
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the Government
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, which have
bounde
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bound
bounded
 to laws.
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This
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These
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all
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apply
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regulations things build
trust
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the trust
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 of
parents
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 to leave their
children
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 at
daycare
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.
For example
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, if there
anything
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is anything
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happend
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happens
 to their
children
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 during
day
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daycare
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care
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 time,
parents
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 have
their
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the
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rights
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right
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 to sue the
daycare
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 body.
On the other hand
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, I strongly believe that leaving
children
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 to a family member is the best
way
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 for
chilrens'
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children'
 growth
such
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grand
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grandparents
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parents
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,
uncle
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uncles
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, or other family members. it is undeniable that people will
give
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pay
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 more
attentions
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attention
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 and genuinely take
care
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for
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of
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 their own
bloods
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blood
types of blood
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, no matter what. so
thats
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that's why
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way
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 working
parents
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 can put their trust 100% and more focus
in
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on
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 their work. In conclusion,
day
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daycare
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care
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 is a good choice to leave
children
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while
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parent
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parents
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 are working, because it
had
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has
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 a legit license, so we can trust them to take
care
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 of
children
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.
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However
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However,
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 I firmly agree that a family member is the best
way
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 to take
care
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children
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of children
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while
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 their
parent
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parents
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are
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is
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 working, because
family
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the family
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 will genuinely
care
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of
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for
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 them, and they will teach them in a good
way
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 to be a better person in future.

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task achievement
Focus on providing more in-depth examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and provide more clarity to your essay.
writing mechanics
Improve sentence structures and refine grammar to enhance readability. Pay attention to minor mistakes that might distract the reader.
coherence cohesion
Enhance paragraph structuring for a more logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and smoothly transition to the next.
task achievement
You clearly address both sides of the argument, which is a strong way to tackle the task.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly state your position, which aids in understanding your viewpoint.
task achievement
Your essay outlines several relevant points in discussing the topic, providing a balanced view.
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