Some people think that child care centres provide the best services for children of pre school age.other working parents think that family members such as grand parents will be better careers for their kids.discuss both views and give your opinion.
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This
essay will examine some key points for both views.
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initially
every child needs full Add a comma
initially,
attentions
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attention
parents
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especially
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, especially
their
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Some
parents
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childcare
care
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center
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centre
provide
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provides
children
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establish
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environments
environment
hiring
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profesionals
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professionals
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of their Use synonyms
children
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the ministry
ministry
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education
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, which have Correct article usage
the Government
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bound
bounded
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all
regulations things build Correct determiner usage
apply
trust
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the trust
parents
to leave their Use synonyms
children
at Use synonyms
daycare
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happens
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day
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parents
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right
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body.
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On the other hand
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way
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children'
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grandparents
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pay
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for
their own Change preposition
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that's why
way
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parents
can put their trust 100% and more focus Use synonyms
in
their work.
In conclusion, Change preposition
on
day
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daycare
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children
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while
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parent
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children
. Use synonyms
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However
I firmly agree that a family member is the best Add a comma
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way
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children
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of children
while
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parents
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the family
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way
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