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The table illustrates the impact of a new speeding fine system introduced un Lanastone.

The table illustrates the impact of a new speeding fine system introduced un Lanastone.
The table and line graph illustrate the impact of a new speeding fine
system
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 introduced in Lanastone in 1992. The table displays the
number
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 of speeding
fines
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 issued between 1995 and 2015,
while
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 the line graph shows the trend in road traffic
accidents
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 from 1985 to 2015. It is evident that the introduction of the fine
system
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 coincided with a significant
decline
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 in traffic
accidents
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, despite the
number
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 of speeding
fines
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 increasing steadily over the years. The
number
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 of speeding
fines
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 issued began at 350 in 1995, three years after the
system
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's introduction.
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 figure rose to 545 by 2000 and peaked at 610 in 2005, before experiencing a slight
decline
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 to 590 in 2015. The data suggests an
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 upward trend in
fines
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 issued over the two-decade period.
In contrast
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, road traffic
accidents
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 exhibited a steady
decline
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 over time. In 1985, prior to the fine
system
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,
accidents
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 stood at approximately 250. By 1995, the
number
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 had dropped to about 150 and continued to decrease, reaching around 50 in 2015.
This
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decline
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 highlights the potential effectiveness of the speeding fine
system
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 in improving road safety.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, number, fines, accidents, decline with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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