The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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THE GIVEN TABLE SHOWS HOW MANY MOBILE

MOBILE

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apply

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PHONES

SOLD

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WERE SOLD

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BY FIVE DIFFERENT COMPANIES FROM 2006 TO 2012.

OVERALL

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IT IS CLEAR THAT

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SALES FOR SAMSUNG AND

APPLE

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INCREASED OVER THE PERIOD ,

WHILE

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THE OPPOSITE TRENDS WERE SEEN IN NOKIA, ERICSON AND MOTOROLA. LOOKING INTO MORE DETAIL, NOKIA STARTED FROM 345

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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AT THE BEGINNING OF

PERIOD

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AND INCREASED TO 436 IN 2007,

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SUDDENLY DROPPED TO 335

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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IN 2012. THE SAME TREND WAS TRUE FOR ERICSSON WAS BEING 74

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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IN 2006 AND THERE WAS A DRAMATIC INCREASE IN 2007,

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A DECLINING TREND WAS SEEN THROUGHOUT THE PERIOD AND HIT THE BOTTOM AT 28

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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, THE SAME DOWNWARD TREND WAS TRUE FOR MOTOROLA. IN TERMS OF SAMSUNG AND

APPLE

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, BOTH OF THEM SOARED BY THE SAME TOKEN. THERE

WAS

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117

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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SALES IN THE FIGURES FOR SAMSUNG IN 2006, IT GRADUALLY INCREASED AND REACHED A PEAK OF 396.5

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MILLIONS

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MILLION

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IN 2012.

HOWEVER

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THERE WAS NO DATA FOR

APPLE

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IN 2006,

NEVERTHELESS

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A DRAMATIC INCREASE WAS OBSERVED IN SALES OF

APPLE

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HITTING ITS HIGHEST POINT AT 135.8

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MILLION

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MILLIONS

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IN 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words apple, millions with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

183 words

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