Some cities have vehicle-free days, when private cars, trucks, motorcycles are banned in the city center. Public transportation like buses, taxis and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, some towns have put in place some public
transport
days
and on
such
days
, private cars, trucks and motorcycles are not allowed in
centers
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.
Although
,
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this
can cause insufficient
transport
, I believe that the positives overshadow the negatives
due to
the fact that it reduces traffic congestion. On the one hand, the proponents of those who support the earlier view say that banning private
transport
on some
days
will cause insufficient
transport
in cities. If the country has few buses, taxis and metros that enter
in
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the city,
this
would mean that some people will not be able to move to town
as a result
of busses not being enough.
Also
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different individuals will be
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and a few of the business places will be closed down.
For example
, research done by Mr James at
bugema
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University showed that nations that announced vehicle-free
days
experienced
shutdown
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of some businesses since some individuals can not bear using taxis. Despite
of
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this
, I still think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
On the other hand
, I agree with those who believe in car-free
days
in
centers
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because it leads to
reduction
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of
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traffic congestion. When so many people have cars that
enters
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in
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the cities, I think
this
will
causes
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a lot of traffic
jam
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during the rush hour of reporting at work and going back home.
Hence
this
leaves the cities congested and polluted.
For instance
, in
Kampala
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Kampala,
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the capital city of Uganda, jam is always a problem during the working
days
and
this
has forced the government to think of banning self-cars in town.
Therefore
,
this
decision will simplify a lot of travel-related issues and increase awareness. In conclusion, even though taxi-free
days
are discouraged in some towns because of less public
transport
, I still believe that the benefits outweigh the negatives
due to
the congestion of many vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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