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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
Chart
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chart
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 illustrates the proportion of the population who live in modern cities in the
world
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,
Africa
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, Asia, Europe, Latin
America
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 and
north
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North
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America
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 from 1950 to 2030 .
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of
population
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the population
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 in urban areas
increase
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increases
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 throughout the whole frame
time
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of time
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 without
decrensing
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decreasing
.
To begin
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, in 1950, the proportion of the
world
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 and
Africa
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 was 29% and 15% respectively. The number of people who prefer to live in modern areas in the
world
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rose
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will
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 reach a peak at 60% by 2030.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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 in
Africa
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 grow to 51% in 2030 .
furtherover
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furthermore
, Asia
Surpassing
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Africa
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 at 54%in 2030 . In detail, the percentage in Europe
initially
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 was 51%in 1950.
Then
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 it Continues
Climbed
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to climb
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 to 72% in 2007
reach
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and reach
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 a peak in 2030 at 78%.
In Contrast
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, the proportion in Latin
America
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 at the beginning was 42%
then
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 it Sharply
increase
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increased
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at
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to
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 84% by 2030. The
last
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 Continent, north
America
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,
have
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has
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 the
higher
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highest
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 percentage among the
world
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 and other continents which Started at 64% in 1950 and
end
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ended
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 at 87%by 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, africa, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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