6.The chart below gives the distribution of worldwide car sharing schemes (%) in 2008 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words

6.The chart below gives the distribution of worldwide car sharing schemes (%) in 2008 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words
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The bar graph illustrates the distribution of car-sharing scheme distribution across the world in two different
years
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, 2008 and 2016. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
Overall
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, North
America
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and Europe experienced a significant upward trend,
while
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South
America
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, Australia, and Asia
are
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in a downward trend in the specified
years
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.
To begin
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with, North
America
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stood at just over 30% in 2008, and in a span of 8
years
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, it
was
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increased to just over 50%.
While
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Europe
upsurge
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to almost 60% in 2008 and later it
was
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declined to half by nearly 35% in 2016. More than North
America
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, Europe shined in 2018
while
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later it
was
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decreased in 2016.
On the other hand
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, South
America
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, Australia, and Asia are with less than 5% in all three areas in 2008
while
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they increased by 2% in three places by 2016. They aren't marked up to at least 10% in both the
years
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of 2008 and 2016 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distribution
  • Global car sharing schemes
  • Changes over time
  • Geographical regions
  • Percentage share
  • Popularity and availability
  • Trends and policy impacts
  • Emerging markets
  • Diversification
  • Even distribution
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