The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wh incere relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourist visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wh incere relevant.
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The graph illustrates how the proportion of
visitors
changed
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in one Caribbean
Island
changed from 2010 to 2017 by using millions in all
number
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, which are divided into two
catagories
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categories
either staying on
cruise
ships
or on the
island
.
Overall
,
mostly
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most
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tourists
were
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stayed on
cruise
ships
at
at
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the beginning but several years later
visitors
were
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gradually increased amount of
people
stayed
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on the
island
at the end
of the year. From 2010 to 2016 both trends were opposite with those who stayed on
cruise
ships
were greater compared who stayed on the
island
.
Proportion
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The proportion
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of
people
who stayed on the
island
from 2013 to 2017 progressively multiplied over time
approximately
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by approximately
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(0.5-2
million
of
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apply
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tourists respectively ).
On the other hand
,
visitors
who stayed on
cruise
ships
were
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dramatically rose from 2011 close to 0.6
million
to 1.5
million
in 2013 but suddenly dropped a little in 2016
however
, gained the same amount of
people
at the end
of the year.
Moreover
,
total
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the total
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visitors
were
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was
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1
million
in 2010 and didn't
droped
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drop
dropped
a little
throghout
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throughout
years
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the years
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and obtained the highest amount of
people
exact
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exactly
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3.5
million
in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, cruise, ships, people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 6 times.
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