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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram gives information about how instant
noodles
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 were produced
by
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in
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 8 different stages.
Overall
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, the production of instant
noodles
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 involves several complex steps that require both labour and capital intensive.
At
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 the beginning, the flour truck go to the storage silos where flour were poured into it.
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, water, oil and flour
mix
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were mixed
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 with a mixer after that
molds
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moulds
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 were put into a
dough
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machine
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 which
makes
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made
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dough
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 into sheets and the sheet
go
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went
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along with
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dough
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a dough
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 cutter
machine
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 where
dough
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 strips
were
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are
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 made.
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, stripes go to a chamber where
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machine
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the machine
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 creates stripes into
round shape
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round-shaped
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noodles
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.
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, the
machine
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put
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puts
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 essential cooking oil and
dry
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dries
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 it and another
machine
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put
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puts
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 those
noodles
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in to
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into
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 cups where
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machine
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the machine
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 adds vegetables and spices.
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At
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 the end,
one
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apply
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another
last
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machine
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 where
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the labelliing
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labelliing
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labelling
 and sealing process were made by that
machine
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 and instant
noodles
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are
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were
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 ready to supply to the market.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, dough, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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