The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.
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These two maps
illustrates
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the site of a university in 2006 and the current day.
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,
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to the year 2006, the outline of the whole space
were
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generally
remain
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the same. As present, one of the land for tree planting
were
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deduced between 2006 and the present day. To be more specific, it was the space on the lower left of the map and there
is
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a the
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new
library
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there.
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Furthermore
,
this
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library
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was located between
parking
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the parking
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lot and the
sports
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ground
then
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move
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to
this
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space. The land for the
library
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in 2006, which
was rebuild
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a
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sports
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centre, was
also
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expanded and
account
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a
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part
from
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parking
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the parking
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lot and
sports
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field. Comparing the map in 2006 and now, except
the
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library
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and the cafeteria, there was a lot of building that did not exist in the past were built after 2006.
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, bus
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,
sports
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center
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and bicycle storage were all newly
build
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built
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, sports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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