You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information about the way in which water used in different countries in 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

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The Image provided above depicts two different charts. The pie chart gives information about 3 main

sectores

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sectors

using

the

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apply

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sweet

water

around the globe in 2000. The second one, the bar graph, shows the

water

consumption patterns in the four countries for the same year.

To begin

with, over

two-third

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two-thirds

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water

was utilized in

agricultural

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the agricultural

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sectore

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sector

sectors

which was the highest proportion among

three

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the three

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sectores

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sectors

Second,

22% of the total

water

usage was for producing commodities in the industries.

lastly

, despite the alerts of using

water

frugally in urban areas, people around the

word

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world

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consumed the lowest proportion of

water

in their houses, 8 per cent. Now turning our attention to the bar chart,

Although

the agricultural activities used the most significant proportion of

water

in India(92%) and China(69%), in Canada, four-fifth were consumed in

industrial

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the industrial

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section.

In addition

, in New Zealand, domestic and agricultural usage nearly consumed

equivalent

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an equivalent

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amount, 44 per cent and 46 % respectively.

Overall

, countries' accumulated consumptions of

water

were concentrated on agricultural activities, and India and China had the same consumption patterns.

In addition

, industries

used

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water

in Canada.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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