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Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think they are a positive or negative development?

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Some nations tend to legislate laws that regulate working
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 for
employees
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. I think
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 positive step in order to ensure
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' rights and regulation of working systems. Commencing with establishing rules to limit working
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, is crucial nowadays because some employers force their
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 to
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 more than their regular
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 and sometimes benefit from these extra
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 not worthwhile.
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, some companies, in order to reduce their expenditure, will prefer to impose overtime systems. The aim of
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 system is to allow their
employees
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 to
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 extra time,
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 the company will pay for each hour.
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, it is noticeable around the world that increasing
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' court cases
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 some businesses do not pay overtime regularly. Unfortunately, these issues take time to solve, especially when there is no clear evidence regarding the quantity of the extra
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 trend is a positive evolution because it will give the
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 their rights,
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, it will reduce
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 of employers cheating.
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,
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 step will contribute to a safe
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 environment,
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 the employers will be more productive and will create a stress-free environment. Because most
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 give priority to their earnings, some
workers
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 prefer to have constant working
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, to spend the remaining
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 of the day with their families or doing some relaxing activities.
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, some housewives, when they decide to
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, will request fixed
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 per day
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 their responsibilities. In conclusion, some governments
persue
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pursue
 in innovating new regulations to prohibit
employees
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 from working extra
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. Some companies, in order to minimize their expenses, may choose to force their
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 to
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 more
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. I believe it is beneficial to ensure
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' dues.

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Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the clarity and sophistication of your writing.
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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, efficiently framing your main argument.
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You provide relevant examples to support your main ideas, which strengthens your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Burnout
  • 2. Work-life balance
  • 3. Productivity
  • 4. Diminishing returns
  • 5. Ethical responsibility
  • 6. Exploitation
  • 7. Fair labor practices
  • 8. Chronic illnesses
  • 9. Job creation
  • 10. Unemployment rates
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