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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? Whay measures can you suggest to make it easier

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It is true that
individuals
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 have
difficuties
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difficulties
 placing themselves on the verge of
risks
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 to establish new
approuches
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approaches
 in their
lives
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. There are a few reasons behind
this
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 which can be solved as well.
To begin
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 with, these days acquiring new skills is easier than used to, yet the
competitions
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competition
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 between
individuals
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 is getting severe.
Thus
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, they may be under pressure unless they meet their goals because the other
condidates
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candidates
 practice industriously which makes the
conditdion
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competition
 harder than it seems.
In other words
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, their fears of failure
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are
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 more bound to prevent them from stepping out of their comfort zone. To illustrate, some international exams are hard to pass for many
tast
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test
 takers, meaning that these exams are more likely to affect
negatievely
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negatively
individuals
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'
lives
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 since they cause plenty of stress for them.
Due to
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this
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,
people
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 may prefer to avoid themselves
of
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such
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 stressful circumstances.
Furthermore
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, the deprived
people
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 might not be able to afford
whether
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to
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taking
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 courses or curricula with regard to their selected task, which results in disappointments and ignorance of their abilities. To tackle
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 issue,
their
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there
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 are two key solutions, including being supported through the
environvent
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environment
 where they live,namely getting financial and sentimental
assists
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assistance
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 from others as well
conducting
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as conducting
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relavent
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relevant
 research to find information in association
to
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with
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 their desires. First and foremost,
family
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the family
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 can play a
pivital
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pivotal
 role in the progress of these
individuals
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, seeking new opportunities in their
lives
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. They can be guided directly towards
their
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the
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 new phases of their
lives
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 as soon as getting constructive advice from one of the
memebers
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members
 of their families or a special professional.
Moreover
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, thanks to technology,
people
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 can search for anything
which
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they
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 are interested in; they even can take free courses if they are not economically supported.
To conclude
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, there are a few reasons why
people
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 find it difficult to experience new situations,
such
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 as having
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 sense of stress
as well as
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 not being successful which leads to
disappointing
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disappointment
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.
Nevertheless
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, there are two measures to overcome
this
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 problem namely, being in a
supporive
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supportive
environments
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environment
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 and looking for related data through the means of
Internet
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the Internet
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adaptation
  • Anxiety
  • Resistance
  • Cultural barriers
  • Self-efficacy
  • Stress management
  • Gradual exposure
  • Open-mindedness
  • Support network
  • Skill-building
  • Mindfulness
  • Meditation
  • Routine
  • Confidence
  • Environmental barriers
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