The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and

 2010
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The bar chart compares reasons for missing work or study,which were made by citizens of one European country between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
although
some absenteeisms' per cent declined, family responsibilities and unexpected situations did not change in the
last
half-decade. In 2000, nearly 45
percent
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of workers cited health-related issues as their primary reason for absenteeism.
This
figure fell to 40
percent
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in 2005 and 35
percent
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in 2010, indicating a gradual improvement in health. Stress,
on the other hand
, had the least impact in 2000, affecting only 6
percent
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of workers.
This
percentage remained almost unchanged in 2005 at 5
percent
,
however
by 2010, non-stress-related absenteeism had increased to 15
percent
. Personal obligations,
such
as meetings, accounted for 15
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of absenteeism in 2000 and rose to 20
percent
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by the end of the period. Family responsibilities were the second biggest problem, preventing 29
percent
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of workers from coming to work in 2000. In 2005,
this
share fell to 23
percent
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per cent
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, reflecting a slight reduction in
such
difficulties.
In addition
, external disruptions
such
as traffic or adverse weather conditions accounted for 10
percent
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in 2000.
This
figure increased significantly in 2005, reaching 16
percent
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, and remained unchanged in 2010.
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