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You are studying at a university in New Zealand. Your passport was stolen three days ago. Write a letter to you embassy, giving details of what happened and asking what you should do next.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Sandeep Kumar, and I have recently shifted to New Zealand from India for study. I lost my college bag which had my Indian
passport
 and other valuable items on my way back home. I am currently pursuing my graduation from Sama University, New Zealand, Today, we had a nomination for a musical event. As per registration guidelines, I need to present my
passport
 at the registration desk. Unfortunately
while
 on my way back home, some burglar snatched my bag from a metro station near the university. I reported
this
 theft incident to the local police, and they registered my complaint and assured me of action.
Additionally
, they asked me to inform the Indian embassy to re-issue my
passport
 because I need an identity proof document on an urgent basis, i am looking for a guidance
passport
 re-issued to me. Looking for your urgent help. Yours faithfully, Sandeep
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about your passport, such as the passport number and the date it was issued. This can help the embassy with the re-issuance process.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition and ensure that each paragraph advances the narrative logically without redundant information. For example, the third and fourth paragraphs could be combined for better flow.
coherence cohesion
Your letter contains a clear greeting and closing, which helps to frame the message professionally.
task achievement
You have adequately covered the main points needed to address the issue with the embassy, ensuring that they have enough information to begin assisting you.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theft
  • stolen
  • embassy
  • contacted
  • local police
  • case number
  • replacement passport
  • procedures
  • emergency assistance
  • temporary identification
  • emergency travel documents
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