“Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and the government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Free educational
program
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has
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always been one of the biggest
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of society, where a
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group
of
people
agree that the government should contribute
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system where
education
should not be related to
people
's financial resources. I personally agree that
education
should be free and easily
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available
. The following essay will explain
this
point of view. For many years,
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education
played a crucial role
on
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people
's lives, where the knowledge of reading and writing was vital and essential. Those who
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born and raised
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uneducated families
and
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could not attend school classes and
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struggle
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on writing
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to write
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their own
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which is one of the simplest
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a person can do. Free educational
progaram
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programme
supported by the
governmet
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government
can motivate these
people
to start their studies whenever there are possibilities. Another benefit of government investment
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free educational
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would be an increase in
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of educated
people
which may indicate a better society. They are able to join their field of interest related to their
education
and easily find a new job. In conclusion, A large budget can devoted to free
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educational
program
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by
government
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to
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those who are not able to support their studies which can produce better life
oppurtinites
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opportunities
to
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all
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educated
people
.
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