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global approach to business and countries that have not. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

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The line graph illustrates the moderate growth in wealthy countries, Globalisers and non-globalised in domestic goods over many times.
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it is clear that
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 wealthy countries and non-globalisers decreased over
time
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Although
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 non-globalised plummeted, it had fluctuated, and in the 1970s, it was at the highest level. But globalised had steady growth.
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, wealthy countries were at nearly between 4 per
cent
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 and 5 per
cent
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 , in the 1960s. Over
time
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, it decreased to around 3 per
cent
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 and above 2 per
cent
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 in the 1970s and 1980s, respectively. In the end, it reached 2 per
cent
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 in the latest year. Non-globalised not only did it fall, but
also
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fluctuated.
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it was at nearly 2.5 per
cent
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, over
time
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, it rocketed in 1970, but it dramatically dropped to approximately 1 per
cent
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.
At the end
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 of the period, it reached 1.5 per
cent
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, in 1990.
by contrast
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, we are witness that the globalists had been at just under 5 per
cent
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, the highest level compared to others, in the 1990s.
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in 19960s, it was at 1.5 per
cent
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. Over
time
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, it reached just under 3 per
cent
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 and it continued in the 1980s increasing trend.
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, it climbed at approximately 5 per
cent
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introduction conclusion
Ensure that the introduction provides a clear outline of what the graph portrays. Strengthen the conclusion to summarize key trends more effectively.
logical structure
Use clearer topic sentences to guide the reader through each paragraph. Consider using transitional phrases for smoother reading.
clear comprehensive ideas
Improve the clarity of your ideas by defining terms like 'globalised' and 'non-globalised.' This will provide better context for your analysis.
task response
The essay adequately identifies and describes the key trends in the data.
relevant specific examples
You have used specific data points from the graph to support your comparisons.
logical structure
There’s a clear attempt to structure the essay with separate sections for different group analyses.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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