The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps above depict an
island
. The first map shows the condition before construction
while
the second map illustrates after it.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are a lot of changes, especially
the
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since the
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island
is adding several new facilities for
tourist
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tourists
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.
For example
, luxury hotels, a fancy restaurant, a venue for reception. At
first,
the
island
was really empty and there was only
beach
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a beach
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and sea. Beforehand, visitors were forbidden to swim, but now they can. Not only that, but
also
there are new sailing boats and visitors walk through pier that have been built to use the sailing
boat
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boats
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. After that, the restaurant and reception is now open for customers. Before construction, people
can
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could
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not have a long trip there because there
was
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were
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no houses to live
.
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in.
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However
, the
island
has been improved by building many
accomodations
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accommodations
. So, the customers can stay longer.
Moreover
, because of some new facilities, the owner of the
island
made two tracks, the footpath and vehicle track.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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