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The table below shows how many tourists from five countries visited Australia in different years from 1991 -1999. (unit: thousands)

The table below shows how many tourists from five countries visited Australia in different years from 1991 -1999. (unit: thousands)
The given table illustrates the number of trippers
whoes
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who
travel
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travelled
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 from the US, Canada, the UK, Germany and Other Europe to Australia between 1991 and 1999. Units are measured in thousands.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of
tourists
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 changed in all nations throughout the whole frame
time
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of time
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.
It is clear that
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 the US and the UK had the
higher
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highest
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 number of
traveler
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travelers
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while
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 Canada had the lowest
tourists
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 compared to other countries.
To begin
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, in 1991, the total
people
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number of people
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 who visited Australia from the US and the UK were 254 and 258
thousand
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 respectively.
Moreover
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, the British
reach
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reached
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 a peak at 509
thousand
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 by 1999 and the
US
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number of US
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tourists
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 significantly increased to 393 in 1999.
Further
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 analyzing, the
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number of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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 from Other Europe was 172 in 1991 and
then
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 rapidly Climbed to 389 by the end of
time
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the time
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 period.
In contrast
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, in 1991, Canadian
tourists
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was
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were
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 51, after two years it was slightly dropped to 48
thousand
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.
Then
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 started to
grew
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grow
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reach
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reaching
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 75
thousand
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 in 1999.
Similarly
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 in Germany, the
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tourists
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number of tourists
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Correct pronoun usage
who traveled
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traveled
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travelled
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 to Australia
rise
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rose
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 during the given years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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