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The table and charts belows gives information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed

The table and charts belows gives information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributed
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The table compares the police budgets and how much
money
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 was spent in one area of Britain between 2017 and 2018 year.
However
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,the bar chart shows how much
money
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 was spent
for
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on
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 three categories in the same year.
Overall
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,
while
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 in the table the most
money
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 came from the National government in both years, in the bar chart
this
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 was for salaries ( officers and staff) was highest spent the amount of
money
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. As a table shows, the National government gave
money
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 of 175.5m in 2017 when in 2018 it was 177.8.Local Taxes and Other sources(eg grants) give
money
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 91.2m and 38.
m
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 respectively but it comes to 2018 they were 102.3m and 38.5m. There is a bit of difference between the total in 2017 was 304.7m and 318.6m As the pie chart shows 75% of
money
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 was spent on salaries ( officers and staff) in 2017 when comes in 2018 it was 69% of
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money
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the money
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. 8% of the budget was spent on building and transport in 2017
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 in 2018 it was 14% of the budget.In both years spending on technology was the same percentage of
money
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 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • national government
  • local taxes
  • expenditure
  • salaries
  • equipment
  • operational costs
  • economic growth
  • inflation
  • governmental policy
  • budget distribution
  • spending priorities
  • technology investment
  • staffing costs
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