Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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individuals say it is good to choose
friends
who always have the same ideas as them.
While
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other
people
think it's better to have
friends
who sometimes disagree with them. So, in
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essay, I am going to discuss both points and give my own opinion. First of all,
people
prefer to choose
friends
who have the same
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.
In other words
, they will understand
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themselves
, their
relationship
will be friendly , they will be always happier
people
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because they
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have
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a nice
relationship
.
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, they will continue their
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in the future, the
relationship
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by good
choosing
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.
As well as
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, if they choose
friends
are
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who are
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similer
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similar
them
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, they will feel comfortable and they can talk
with
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them any time they want , and
also
they can understand them if they have
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or if they sick
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because their
emotion
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is a close
of
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them. So, why
that's
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an important
people
have
choose
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friends
who have the same character, which
it
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has benefits for them in the future
.
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Secondly
, some individuals like to choose
friends
who
different
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are different
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of
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them. To illustrate, maybe
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it
has
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useful
them
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, which
this
relation
support
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supports
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them to improve.
Moreover
, two students are
friends
, and
anther
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another
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one
want
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to choose a
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more
major
up
his
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level , but his
friends
advise him to
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avoid
this
a
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more
,
due to
it is not
a
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good for him. So,
this
kind of
relation
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relationship
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has benefits.
However
, some
friends
can't understand
themselve
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themselves
, and their
relation
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relationship
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will be
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,
as well as
they will break
this
relation
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relationship
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.
Therefore
, the
relationship
needs to
understand
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and some patience.
To conclude
, in my opinion , I prefer to choose
friends
who have the same ideas , because I will feel more glad with them and I can take my rest
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when I
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with them.
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Your introduction provides a clear outline of the two viewpoints and states your intention to discuss them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious environment
  • validation
  • limit personal growth
  • exposure to new ideas
  • diversity of thought
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • deepen relationships
  • intellectual growth
  • emotional growth
  • like-minded
  • healthy disagreements
  • diverse perspectives
  • finding a balance
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