In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
With the advancement of
Technology
there are few automobile companies which have already manufactured Add a comma
Technology,
cars
wchich
can give the driver an option to put their vehicle in an auto automatic state. In the next decade, Correct your spelling
which
driverless
vehicles
are predicted to be more common and they might completed
replace the current Replace the word
completely
driver base
Correct your spelling
driver-based
vehicles
. In this
essay
we will discuss the merits and Add a comma
essay,
this the
demerits of both Correct determiner usage
apply
kind
of Change to a plural noun
kinds
vehicles
in detail.
Formost
, Correct your spelling
First
driverless
cars
are already running in the market and the biggest reason why people
admire these cars
is the fact that a person who isn't good enough in
driving can Change preposition
at
also
use their personal vehicles
to travel. Therefore
the need of
a driving licence to drive a car will no longer be there and Change preposition
for
people
can save the time and money which they spend on acquiring a driving licence. Moreover
, the number of accidents will be reduced if there is no human behind the wheel. People
these days try to save the
time Correct article usage
apply
as a result
private higher speeds especially
on national highways. Add the comma(s)
, especially
However
if Add a comma
However,
government
Add an article
the government
put
a speed limit on Wrong verb form
puts
vehicles
then
driverless
vehicles
will be able to follow those speed limit rules easily as compared to a
Correct article usage
apply
human
.
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Besides
this
there are a number of disadvantages. Add a comma
this,
Firstly
, there are lot
there Add an article
a lot
are
a lot of Change the verb form
is
individual
which are employed as drivers and they will lose their jobs. Change to a plural noun
individuals
Moreover
, the technology required to run a vehicle needs to be developed properly so that people
are not hesitant to buy these cars
. Also
, there is a possibility that these vehicles
will be expensive than the traditional ones ,as the cost required to develop such
transportation will require huge investments and
Correct word choice
apply
this
is the reason why only few
companies are producing Change the article
a few
driverless
car features and it will take few that kids to make these cars
for the for less fortunate part of the population.
In conclusion, Although
driverless
cars
are expensive to develop and
many drivers will lose their jobs. Correct word choice
apply
However
, these vehicles
can reduce number
of accidents on roads Change the article
the number
while
being more convenient to people
with Limited driving experience.Submitted by Narayan Khajuria on
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task achievement
Address the issue of potential technological failures in driverless cars, which is a significant disadvantage that hasn't been addressed.
task achievement
Provide more concrete examples or data to support your points, which will make the essay more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next for improved coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points.
coherence cohesion
You have well-structured paragraphs that each cover a distinct point related to the topic.
task achievement
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a balanced view.
task achievement
A clear and complete response to the task has been provided, covering several aspects of the impact of driverless vehicles.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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