It is often said that the governments spend too much of money on the project to protect wildlife. While there are other problems thats more important? Do you agree or disagree?
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task achievement
Ensure your arguments are fully developed and supported with specific examples. For instance, in your argument about economic equality, provide more specific examples or data to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving logical flow and transitions between sentences and paragraphs for greater clarity. This can help in better connecting your ideas.
task achievement
You present a clear stance that governments should prioritize other important issues like economic equality and the education system alongside wildlife protection.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, effectively framing your argument.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.