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with the rise e-books comes the decline in paper boos. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

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In
this
 period of digitalization, there are different opinions regarding the replacement of physical things with electronic ones. In
this
 digital era, the majority of people are using e-
books
\
instead
 of
books
 made up of paper. A group of youth consider
this
 as an achievement
while
 others believe that it is not a great idea. The following paragraph will discuss the merits and demerits of
this
 trend. The main positive side of the electronic book is its portability. Anybody can carry a book wherever they go without any burden of heavy luggage.
for example
, for someone who loves reading
books
 and travels a lot as a part of their job or personal, there is no need to pack all the
books
.
In addition
 to
this
, cost-effectiveness is another benefit of e-
books
. Reading is an expensive hobby, but e-
books
 make it more affordable by providing access to more
books
 at a lower rate.
On the other hand
, the first and foremost drawback of e-
books
 is potential eye strain. The light produced by the screen makes more fatigued eyes look dull.
For example
, parents who like to divert their children from screen time to any activities like storybook reading, never opt for
this
 facility for their growing little one. The next negative aspect is distractions as notifications from social media and some other applications may lead to a lack of focus and joyfulness in learning. Ultimately, the choice between an
e-bookbook
Correct your spelling
e-book book
 and a paper book depends on individual preferences like expense, space to keep, accessibility, customization, ownership and many more. If someone is interested in the tactile experience of physical records and loves a good collection
then
 the traditional way is better.
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task achievement
Try to fully develop your points with more detailed examples and explanations to improve clarity and task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has clear topic sentences and transitions to enhance coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction outlines the topic effectively, mentioning both sides of the argument.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear explanation of both advantages and disadvantages of e-books.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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